Her

17 Dec 2014 14 Comments

by ~ Sadie ~ in Poetry Tags: , , ,

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I still see her in there …

Surrounded by the wrinkles and worry lines.

The weight of the world on her shoulders,

The keeper of memories and time.

Her mind aches,

And soon the day breaks.

And this night owl in her

Won’t let her mind shut down.

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  1. charlypriest
    Dec 17, 2014 @ 05:07:49

    Nice poem windchimes, a.k.a SayE. A sad one but touching poem

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  2. ~ Sadie ~
    Dec 17, 2014 @ 05:44:30

    Thanks Charly – most of my poetry is sad, for some reason. Always has been, even when I was a teenager. Not sure why – just how that particular genre affects me. I know you’ve been busy, but would love for you to read the other 2 installments from my novel – parts 3 & 4? Would love your feedback. 🙂
    Hope you are having a great day! How are your stories coming? Been writing on all 3 blogs tonight and on my novel – total 2nd wind and wild hair so totally flowing with it 😉 Shit, my husband will be up soon, may make him breakfast . . . I’m not much on breakfast (meaning I don’t eat it, but I have been up for quite some time w/o eating, so getting hungry), so he’ll like that ❤

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  3. martha0stout
    Dec 18, 2014 @ 11:39:01

    Sounds about right. Very wonderfully written!

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  4. markbialczak
    Dec 19, 2014 @ 10:20:23

    Yes, Sadie. Can’t sleep, write sad poetry about can’t sleep, eat breakfast with hubby. I hope that helped you get to sleep! Nice work.

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    • ~ Sadie ~
      Dec 29, 2014 @ 02:28:19

      Thanks Mark! I have to admit, at 5:30 am, my battery just died – no warning, just poof! I had been up about 23 hours at that point. My husband was still sleeping, so I just went to sleep. No breakfast . . . but lots of writing that night – it was an inspired night & I was in the zone, so rode it out – posted on all my blogs and worked on the novel! 🙂

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      • markbialczak
        Dec 29, 2014 @ 08:32:27

        That’s a great night, Sadie. Sometimes I wake up in the wee with the next greatest idea and boom, I know I will be up wide-eyed until I get it down, and then, as you say, the tank is very empty. 🙂

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  5. Paul
    Dec 23, 2014 @ 04:42:59

    Well written Sadie. very evocative.

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  6. yprior1
    Jan 09, 2015 @ 21:07:49

    Sadie – I love this poem for a few reasons. – first – it is one I can relate with – and I know many of us night owls can –
    and second, I love the alliteration with the w’s in the first stanza – (and is it winkles or wrinkles?) – ha! but then I also like that you let the w’s go after that – the flow felt natural and also allows the poem to have “movement” – which I think you are really good at….
    like the first stanza we see her in there – with the tasty visual – “keeper of memories”
    and then the second one – I am not sure how to articulate it all – but the opening and ending ones of the mind – with day breaking – allows us to move through this poem…

    lastly, I read the comments above and instead of sadness here – I felt depth – I felt realism – and maybe even a hint of angst – which could all fall under sadness – but it was more like this “Her” was contemplative and weighed down – which feels slightly different from sad… I dunno –
    but two thumbs up!

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  7. yprior1
    Jan 18, 2015 @ 22:49:29

    I will be back to read part 5 later this week – looking forward to it ❤

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